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• Artist: chiquito mexicanito
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• Date: 09/12/2010
• Tags: untitled

what the *** iz da point of life if it all it brings me is pain i thought karma was real but i did things for the good and all that did was stab me str8 in the back so i turned my ways and karma made sense i did bad and bad came back but i changed my ways and karma iz once again a ****** the world i constructed piece by piece started to fall apart and yet everything i had and grew with has been stripped from me and no matter what i do i can never revive those things which have been gone in wind of no return as temptations of ending it all have been standing in my face. attepmting a destionation in the skies to c those which i loved and stay alive in my heart but parted themselves from earth and gone to heaven waiting for the rest of us one day and yet sadness and desperation ive hidden all of my life follows me like a lion stalking its prey ive pleed prayed and shouted for an answer but my prays have yet to b answered and yet as i work for those things that i want and finally earned they get torn away yea u noe who u r and people taking trust of one and bending it until the truth is spoken from someone else...

Comments

[TheWhirld]

I really like the idea here. This seems like it could be a good start. However, I suggest that you put a little more effort into the conventions. After the second time I understood, but with the spelling and punctuation not shined up I think many people will over-look this as something pointless. 3/5, because the idea is awesome, but it needs to be readable for people to read it. You have to make sure the reader understands the first time they read through it.