I tried to stand... But fell..

• Artist: Spades34
• Description: I was in the mood for a poem. Which I did write one but its a bit suicidal... so just forget about it... But if you know anyone that wants to take their life. Stay there for them. They will need someone that cares about them. Even if your just to much of a coward and watch them take their lives... Anybody that has been bullied take two words from me... STAND UP!!! It will do you a WORLD of good. Trust me It will be rusty at first but will really get better as you go.
• Date: 06/04/2011
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Walking down the school halls
Kids making fun of her
She brushes off their comments
She knows to well about life

The many lies and rumors spreading
She keeps her head held high
Mistakes followed one by one
She is just beginning a new life

Many things she has suffered
Bullied, mistreated, mistaken
She has gone through it all
Yet she is still here with us

How? How does she keep her head held high?
Why? Why does she go through this all?
Please explain, and say the truth
She has not even tried to stop the pain from flowing

"I'm done with these endeavors," she said
She is taking a stand
We all thought wrong of her
She made up her mind

Took the blade from the kitchen
The comments she hears in her head
"Your worthless, dumb, nothing, weak!"
Closer to her chest the blade went

The more she heard those dreadful comments
The more the blade sunk into her skin
She has had enough of life
Forcefully pushed the blade in

She collasped to the cold ground
Surrounded by her blood
A life was wasted, and you could of changed it
A life that would have changed the Earth in many ways...

Comments

[Spades34]

Alright. I'll remake it.

[WaterfallSnapDragon]

...Wow,well... too bad for the ending, but I guess its true.
Maybe you can remake this. Only instead,at the end,
give why she would be able to go on... although the end does get the point across... but maybe to change be positive, she felt that way, but even a few kind words from one person had changed her heart.