Coverage

• Artist: cocobird1234
• Description: A poem with four made up words, thought it gave it more character
• Date: 07/16/2012
• Tags: coverage

Gleeping, shining, spreading everywhere
cloudy, hazy, non so bright
sleeshing, swooshing, wet to touch
ground so filled, cheer all around
light turned on
trees aglow
Dappling chunks fall one after another
mountains, plains, addles all dissapear
a white shimmering blanket
all without fear

Comments

[nbetweener]

"all without fear" strikes me as out of place. It is unconnected to the rest of the piece. You touched on cheer, but only just; what does fear or lack of have to do with anything here? Expand, rewrite.