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The River
There is a river in my world. It is darker then my dead soul. Forever poisoned by never knowing the truth. The truth of existence. I walk slowly up to my river. It slowly starts to boil. The boiling is the screaming of a million people with lives wishing they could have more. It sickens me to hear. Why do they need more then life? That was Gods gift to them. The living are so selfish. They all should suffer the terrible fate I have bestowed upon me. I can not pray to be set free for my lips are stone. I can not even wish. All I can do to help these selfish rats is end this so called "misery". Why do they ask more of God when all they need is right in front of them?
I will end most there lives right now, but the rest will suffer a long slow cruel death. Serves them right for there stupidity.






User Comments: [4]
shardinea
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Sun Mar 23, 2008 @ 07:35am


Beautiful start. Simple, yet very deep. Its almost poetic the way you write.

If your aiming for a novel, your going to have to write a lot more to fill a chapter. Right now, you're at about two paragraphs. Just work on the length. You're well on your way. cool


ocean_blue_forever
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Sun Mar 23, 2008 @ 05:51pm


Thank you !!!!!!!!
lots of thanks i love comments!!!
especially ones that tell me what im doing wrong...
ill keep working on the length!!


Dependent
Community Member





Sun Mar 30, 2008 @ 05:38am


I love this!!! heart Please read the rest of mine as well!


ocean_blue_forever
Community Member





Sun Apr 06, 2008 @ 03:09am


okies XD


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