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The fluffy winter willows blow
Through the flakes of pearl white snow
While icicles drip their crystal blood
Which makes the tiny valleys of snow flood
Jack frost tease the windows with chill
And kids slide down the marshmallow hill
Twinkling snowflakes fall slowly from above
Just like two snow birds who are falling in love
- Title: Winter Willows
- Artist: keilarah
- Description: The first poem I have ever written, besides in elementary school LOL So, I hope it's good!
- Date: 12/12/2008
- Tags: winter willows
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Comments (7 Comments)
- True Sparrow - 12/08/2009
- It's good, although I don't know how twinkling snowflakes falling slowly from above are at all like two snows birds who are falling in love. Nice poem - I find it hard to believe it's your first poem since Elementary School. Then again, you could be a 6th grader, for all we know.
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- sheeka98 - 05/27/2009
- not short but not long and its a wonderful poem i have only seen one that is equal, 5
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- Reznik06 - 05/02/2009
- the poem in whole is good. i do enjoy the blood part a lot! all in all my rating is: 5! lol good job
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- kajido - 03/25/2009
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To be honest, it's a good idea to have the crystal blood for icicles.
But not with everything else there; it seems a little... misplaced.
You have all these images of light, bright, pure, holy, whatever.
And the blood is 'staining' the purity set up within this poem.
But overall I'd say keep going.
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- mai mai 17 - 03/13/2009
- great work keep it up
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- Paper Crane Kiko - 12/29/2008
- the poem in whole is good. i do enjoy the blood part a lot! all in all my rating is: 5! lol good job
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- keilarah - 12/16/2008
- Thanks guys! I like the blood part too! Gives the poem an unexpected dark side mwahahahaha
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