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"I now introduce the class of 2007, Sandra Adams, Eric Ahrens, James Allen..."
A young girl, about 5" 3', blue eyes, dark blonde hair, leaned against the fence of the football field looking out onto the green grassy field watching everyone as they went to pick up their diploma followed by a hand shake from the principal.
Freshman year was over, and surprisingly not as hard as she thought it would be. She made more friends; got good grades and finished one out of the two years of PE she had to take. In her mind all and all it was a good year...
"GO ERIC!" her friend yelled from beside her nudging her to pay attention, "Come on space cadet, he is almost off the stage!"
"Huh?," Yuffie said dumb founded at what her friend said being lost in her own little world of thoughts. "Oh sorry Carly..."
Her friend just continued talking while watching as Eric sat down after getting his diploma. “Star football player, went to state four times won three. Now that man is fine.... I wish he wasn't a senior. I'll miss having him as a boyfriend... and doing other stuff with him..., "she finished turning to look at Yuffie with a smirk.
Yuffie picked up on what Carly was suggesting and her jaw dropped a little, not expecting to hear that. She shook her head and replied simply, "You are so bad... "
Yuffie was "popular," one of the few people freshman and seniors approved of and wanted to date. For senior boys, popular and "easy" was a good mix. She wasn't like them completely, Yuffie had no desire to sleep around, but she did drink. Least she didn't have asix hundered dollar Louis Vuilton bag, and matching LV shoes.
She was like them in some respects. Yuffie was young, pretty and confident about herself, and her family was rich, something that always helps a person’s popularity.
- Title: My Life As A Teenage Vampire 1
- Artist: icefire26
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Description:
Part 1!
I started writing this Aug 20th 2005. As you all know, it is long past that date. Since Gaia has created a writing arena (thank you Gaia.) This story has a new life. Anyways I hope you enjoy! - Date: 07/15/2008
- Tags: vampire teenage teen life vamp
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Comments (7 Comments)
- 1X LA DE DA X1 - 01/30/2010
- short, and i don't believe that yuffie doesn't seem to fit the person. but a 4/5 seems to do.~
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- Sissygoogle - 12/17/2009
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A few things I want to say:
-MARY SUE MUCH?
-Try to elaborate more on your sentences
-I can't stand the name Yuffie, but you can just pretend you didn't see this one (it's a personal opinion, after all)
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- Smashing Heartbeats - 04/11/2009
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i think you may need more details and expressions.
I agree though, it's kinda short for a chapter. I'm looking forward to other chapters. Keep me updated ![: - Report As Spam
- turtlekwack - 07/22/2008
- yeah I agree you need to put more personality into it but its still awesome ^^
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- Robotic Panic Attack - 07/20/2008
- I didnt read it, I just had to say, OHSHIT! Carly is my name, same spelling. ;D
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- Astomiko - 07/15/2008
- This is really good. i like the writing format you are in. You definitly know how to write, that is good! I like the reactions, and I think Yuffie is a fine name. It makes her sound mysterius and exotic. A lot of guys go for that. Keep up your love for writing!
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- ElladoraZeller - 07/15/2008
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It's a bit short for a chapter, but it's okay. It's lacking in the uphill rise for the start of complications, but it has a decent basic situation.
The only non-technical clash is the obviouly American names and the single Japanese one. The distinction is too polar opposite. Other than that, keep writing, you're doing very well and I only want more from each "chapter". - Report As Spam