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A Vampire's Love
Prologue and Chapter One
Prologue
"Hey. Wait up!" I call to my best friend Kai. My name is Kayuki Sou. I'm eighteen years old, and this is the story of how I fell in love with a Vampire.
Chapter One : A Vampire's Love
"Hey Kayuki! What's up?" Says Kai giving me a giant hug. "Not much. You?" "I'm just hanging out with my cousin. He's visiting for a while and then he's going to live with me for atleast two or three years." "What's your cousin's name?" I ask in curosity. "Oh. His name is Alexander. He's somewhere around here." "Ok. Well, see you later Kai." "See ya Kayuki!" I walk down a path in a forest. I sense a presense somewhere near me. I quickly turn around. "H...Hello? Who's there?" I look around everywhere. Then, that's when I first saw him. A tall figure leaning against a tree in a black cloak. His brown spiky hair sticking out in all directons. His eyes open, green eyes staring at me. The thing I knew, was that I should run. But I couldn't. I was staring into the eyes of a total stranger. What I didn't know was that I was staring into the eyes of a Vampire.
- by sakura_1258 |
- Fiction
- | Submitted on 10/26/2008 |
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- Title: A Vampire's Love
- Artist: sakura_1258
- Description: My Vampire story. : A Vampire's Love.
- Date: 10/26/2008
- Tags: vampires love
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Comments (7 Comments)
- LifesLullaby - 11/30/2008
- its a good start keep going!! ^^
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- mistressofthedarkside - 11/30/2008
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good start, but you need to add a bit more body to it.
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- Awoik - 11/29/2008
- btw great beginning you should continue even if you dont win
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- Awoik - 11/29/2008
- @ inersha: so what if we're not japanese? ppl call me kai all the time...
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- cuddle bunz2 - 11/29/2008
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you gotta draw the vampire dude! I wanna see him! lol
other then that it is petty good. - Report As Spam
- PaperSongs - 11/29/2008
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Agreed. Far too many vampires. I've written a piece on them myself. *shrugs* Supply and demand. I supply what they demand, and Vampires are it for now. Just like dragons when Eragon was a hit. All the same, I'm looking forward to moving away from vampires.
Now, as for the writing itself.
1. Learn to paragraph.
2.Learn how to write speech correctly.
3. We are not Japanese or Chinese. Try to avoid these kinds of names. - Report As Spam
- originalskaterdude - 11/29/2008
- ya man to much writings bout vampires and vampires in love
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