They will Fall

• Artist: CitzenGuard
• Description: He worked for an Empire
  that he loved very much,
  the king , the senate even the army were corrupted and ruthless.
  Some had honor for the first empire but time has passed,
  things need to be done ,
  betrayal , love,war,hate,honor,
  
  
  sorry if i meant some mistakes.
• Date: 07/28/2008
• Tags:

Here is a short note of my story , i will create a journal of it later , if i win


Edward was a brave warrior for the empire for 12 years , when the kingdom had a new senate,Army guards, King , Things changed. edward was one day choose to guard the king
in a patrol to a nearby city , when it was ambushed by masked men and all were killed also
the king, 2 of Edwards close freinds, and edward were alive still and hurt , edward and his friends are framed for murder because thier farmers and knights say they witnessed the guards did it , later they find out , that the kings double was killed and the real king staged it so vetrans of the old empire wont start a revolution

Comments

[La-La-Amour]

Nice job! smile

[joshagman]

Ik r

[Maderka]

Do you understand the purpose of a comma?

[Magical-Athy]

you need to organize it... pharagraphs do wonders

nice plot- story line i guess

[boom_chick13]

you need spell check. baaaaaadly

[leah81]

well to be honest i think its kinda hard to read

[Skadi Sundermount]

I'm sorry but the structure of that was terrible. I understand you are presenting an idea, what I don't understand is what you wrote. I can't read that!