Bace Infiltration 1(BI1).

• Artist: spartan3115
• Description: Blue team infiltrates a rebel bace near the Endarius system asteroid belt.
• Date: 01/09/2009
• Tags: bace infiltration1

John said"Kelly,Sam,take flanking positions on the left and right,take the MA2B's we brought,Linda, take the sniper position in the steel rafters directly above"John ordered over the suits com systems."Kurt, you come with me and help take out the guards at the door ahead."Blue teams mission was to take Colonial Wats. He was the rebels main comander in this hollowed out asteroid."This asteroid seems to simulate a human city,there's tall buildings around every corner,but from the outside it looks just like a normal asteroid."John wispered over the com.
Three shots couphed out of Lindas sniper rifle,three guards hit the floor by head shots. The other two also died of head shots by Kelly and Sam three seconds later.




wait for the next section later when i have enough gold to do so.I will be posting on my journal until such time.......

Comments

[Rakashael]

It isn't all that interesting... there just isn't enough emotional content. When you write something like this people want more detail into what the characters are thinking. It keeps them interested. Also the grammar errors make it sort of difficult to read and detract from what is going on in the story. Keep trying. 2/5