Right time, wrong place part 1

• Artist: paintball_kable
• Description: HMMMM not so good for a first time short story writter
• Date: 04/22/2009
• Tags: story

Well today is my 7 month ann. with my GF. Bareky surviving in 7th gr... But frick i didnt get her anything. I dont want to lose her now not this time ive let go of to many things. I quickly go to the jewlery store to buy her something. I buy her a $150 neckalace. I walk and see a boy named jhayron eyeing me out he was always jealous of me. I walk around and i cant find her. I walk around school late to almost all my classes and i cant seem to find her. I start to think something horrible happened to her but i put that out of my mind. I look around and find her at the store, I was shocked, mad and sad at the same time. I saw her hoding hands with jhayron. Full on not her refusing but walking down the isles talking I moved in quickly to stop them or kick jhayrons a**, but something stopped me I dont know what it was. I realized if she really wants me or is she using me. I noticed we havent had a kiss in 4 months. Barely hanging out together...
Part 2 to come out soon
Comment if i should make another 1 or not or just start a diffrent one TY for reading.

Comments

[Toxic Saliva]

There are many problems here, incorrect use of periods, bad sentence flow, choppy, bad capitalization, just dreadful punctuation, horrible story plot, and ALL of your other work is stolen. Cant you admit to yourself that you are plagiarizing fool? You cant write, cant draw, and cant even make something ORIGINAL. This is overdone, plus you probably copy and pasted half of it. Oh, and I dont give a rat's a** if you delete this comment because more of them like this will come.

[Paranoid Starwing]

It's called grammar. Use it.

It's also called spell check and sentence formatting. Use it.

[gears106]

so fukken long