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Chapter 1-The Beginning
It was a very dark night; the family had already gone to sleep for the night. Suddenly all of the house doors are blown to the ground. Thirty people dressed in long flowing capes entered the house and drew their swords. Once in the house the men started to run through the home killing all they found. Some tried to fight, all are killed.
One woman and her two children were left. The woman shoves her two children into a closet, and closes and locks the closet door. The woman draws a sword from the suit of armor on the wall. Suddenly the sword is enveloped in, a hazy light, karma flows into the sword. The door of the room was blown down by a flash of black light, also karma. A man comes through the door and swung his sword. The woman blocks the strike with her sword, the man’s sword shatters. The woman kicked the man in the stomach his head flew down, the woman swung and cuts of the man’s head. Three other men entered the room all of them suffered the same fate. Finally a man in a long blood-red cape entered the room. The woman stops and faces the man.
“Comet,” Says the woman. “What are you doing here?”
“Isn’t it obvious what I'm doing here, Malian,” He replied, “I’m killing your family!” The sword he was holding was blood stained and glowing with a black light (yah also karma). Malian pulled her sword up strait.
“Then I guess I’ll just have to kill you to!” She yelled. Then she charged him and ran him through the stomach, all of a sudden Comet disappeared into a puff of smoke.
Instantly he appeared behind Malian.
“Now Malian,” Comet taunted “I thought you better than that.” And with that Comet stabbed Malian in the back.
- by toonlink1995 |
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- | Submitted on 07/23/2009 |
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- Title: Chapter One-The Beginning
- Artist: toonlink1995
- Description: The first chapter of a book i wrote based on the reply I'll decide weather to put the rest on here
- Date: 07/23/2009
- Tags: chapter onethe beginning
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Comments (1 Comments)
- milk king - 07/25/2009
- Very interesting. I love to judge people on their writing, as it is my job. You need to make it a little more interesting. You need to bring the reader closer. 5 stars though! smile
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