Love and Hate: Forever Bound

• Artist: Kozmotis Pitchiner
• Description: This is the opening to a story I plan to write, but I need feedback to make it better...also to make it longer. Please comment and tell me what you think!
• Date: 08/13/2010
• Tags: love hate forever bound

My parents chose her; it was custom for the parents to choose their son's bride. She pretended to love me. But all she wanted was my looks and money. I had no choice but to marry her. My parents chose her. I didn't.
But he really did love me. He actually cared for me, he wanted to keep me safe. But there was one problem.
He's a human.
I'm not.

Comments

[Kozmotis Pitchiner]

biggrin i cant wait to see it!!

[Vintage Dreams]

Ahh, yaoi. Good now i know :] and ahh, seems like a very interesting topic to dwell on . I wrote some form of one once, I might post it up soon, if you're interested :]

[Kozmotis Pitchiner]

yaoi, but not explicit

[Vintage Dreams]

Ahh, I see. Is this some form of yoi ? Or whatever it's called? Sorry, as asian as I am, I still don't know what the word is *sweat* But Ahh, lovely, I understand now biggrin

[Kozmotis Pitchiner]

oooooh his parents chose him a bride, but he doesnt like her. I'll fix that

[Vintage Dreams]

Well, I don't understand the "my parents chose her, I didn't, she pretended to love me..." etc.etc. Does this mean like they adopted someone or she's like a new family member? The second part though about boy is eerie. I loved it :]

[Vintage Dreams]

Sounds enticing . The first bi about the parents is a bit confusing tho love . Anyway, I look forward to the story, read my stories?