Insanity is only a word

• Artist: Derian Ardor
• Description: I have to say this is not my normal style of work
• Date: 11/19/2008
• Tags: insanity

Correct me when I'm wrong,
but only if your right,
for when lies fall around me,
should I only smile bright,
SO touch me,
I wont bite,
hurt me,
I wont cry,
Kill me,
I wont hate,
just smile,
smile,
smile,
And wait,
You see,
patience doesn't always visit me,
but it is still within,
I wait never fro revenge,
for what happens is by one's own ruin,
and I wonder on and on again,
smiling insanely,
or at least thats what you would call me today,
what makes things right and wrong?
who said life mattered,
when maybe your just hearing wrong,
its always ONE or two things,
that are not even among us,
not even real at times,
that decide for us perhaps?
who says I'm wrong,
and your right?
what if we are held back only by one thing,
what if morals deny us vision in today's,
what is it called?
Society?

Comments

[Obsidian Froth]

I like what you were trying to say with the theme of insanity only being a word, I actually did one very similiar to this so that's what drew me.
Have you considered not using all the commas and experimenting with poetic rhythym?
I'm not sure if it would make much of a difference, but it can. Maybe some line breaks/stanzas as well, just so it can be taken in easier, because at points I would forget what I just read. I like it though.

[Uay]

Do you mind if I use this in a song?
Send me a PM? 3nodding

[Diamond_of_Love]

T-T so good and sad T-T