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Tears fall, I hear them ring,
Blood drips, I feel it sting.
My heart breaks, I hear it crack,
My soul crumbles, I feel no more.
The sound of silence, do you hear?
The silence of sound, i dont hear.
My skin feels warm, my blood is frozen,
The pulsing i dont feel, The stillness i breathe.
When your locked inside your head, do you wish that you were dead?
Im not really alone, but i know i am,
Crying alone beside the bed.
The bars on the window, solid steel,
Im not sure, i can not feel.
The glass against my face, then its gone with out a trace.
I am falling, at least i think,
I have lost all feeling inside of me.
My body is just an empty shell, Im lost in side this solid hell.
The being for which i used to be, is nothing but cold pink,
The shadow of who i once was, is nothing at all, just because.
The wind is blowing my shell around, flying around i cant get down.
I've lost control of everything, Im all alone inside of me.
- by Reap The Halls |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 04/24/2009 |
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- Title: Abyss Of A Lonely Heart
- Artist: Reap The Halls
- Description: This is again in rememberance of someone i once knew...... Its really hard to talk about so i am writing my feelings down in remeberance of how they told me they felt, and how there life was befor they ended it....... T_T
- Date: 04/24/2009
- Tags: abyss lonely heart
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Comments (5 Comments)
- Naia Underwood - 05/26/2009
- Geat, the mechanics could use some work. Like Llywelyn said. I think you would benefit from some freeform instead of rhyming schemes. Oh, and you spelled abyss wrong.
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- Llywelyn Fawr - 04/28/2009
- ke it sound forced
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- Llywelyn Fawr - 04/28/2009
- I can tell that there is a lot of emotion here. Here are my comments from least important to most important. 1) watch out for things like "can not"; that should be "cannot." 2) I would break up a few of the lines. 3) Sometimes especially towards the end, the rhyming really sounds forced. You can rhyme all you want, but don't ma
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- Lord Umari - 04/24/2009
- Very nice.
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- Reap The Halls - 04/24/2009
- I just wanted to say that this means alot to me, and if this offends you in any way i am truly sorry, but i must write what i feel, for this is a release of the sadness i bear.
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