broken hearted

• Artist: edd1140
• Description:
• Date: 03/29/2012
• Tags: broken rejected

i love the feel of the rain on my back
it hides the tears when my eyes crack
the girl who had me rejected
split my heart open to be dissected

Comments

[Dhampyresa]

1) sad story, sorry bro

2) the third line sounds off, that's not just my inner grammar nazi here

3) rejected ends the whole concept, but the word dissected continues it, it just sounds kind...weird

Good poem!