Curse Of The Ancient Gyroid

• Artist: Miles 127
• Description: Here's a story about a girl who did almost anything.She was a Wizard Girl.
  
  
  Whatever she wants,is your command.
  
  I got the idea from Wizards of Waverly Place and Elfen Lied.
  
  MY WEIRD COUSIN MADE IT BUT THEY MADE IT ON MY PROFILE!!!!FACT!!!
• Date: 07/19/2008
• Tags: coolstory

Once upon a time there was a girl named Alex.She was a wizard girl.Whatever she wants is your command. She was a polite little girl until it was exposed. She grew invisible arms on her back. She was born with cat ears on her head,but they weren't soft,they were hard. Her parents died,leaving her alone when she was 6. Alex was cursed when she was 8. She stared at a cursed gyroid to turn into an evil spirit cursed she commanded the world to be in her command. And if anyone did anything wrong,she can just burn you to ashes.Alex would not follow anyone elses rules.Or else if they argued with her,you should know this happens...they burn.Soon she burned everyone the curse was still kept on the gyroid she looked at it once more.Her blood stream and veins burned so much she was confused just to destroy herself burning.Alex was never exposed once more.Her horns and arms dissapeared.She was normal.She hid away the gyroid forever until her death.The curse held onto her in her grave.But at the funeral,it wasn't exposed.But whoever looked at the cursed gyroid,they will burn.It was all the curse who destroyed her manners,and the people.

OMG THIS IS NOT MY STORY PEOPLE!WHY CANT U READ THE COMMENT I POSTED?????????JANK THIS!

Comments

[Zombie Pill]

To the author: This story seems a bit stolen from Elfin Lied, with the ears, invisible arms, and magic. Also, it was choppy, more like a story line.

[Kidalanna]

{To whoever the author may be:}
Maybe put a few words in it.. It was too short for the idea to develop into a fully blossomed story.
Develop it more. Also, when you write, don't write with anyone on your shoulder. As in, while you write, don't think about what the opinion of others will be. Just write precisely what you want to write.
You just have to use proper grammar and all that sort of technical stuff.

[dalyna]

Uhm...it's a little messy. You should probably think about it before you write it :/

[iesmusie]

... Just think about it a little more.

[MightyWonderWoman]

The best advice I can give you is to listen to your English teacher more. This story makes absolutely no sense, is stiff and unoriginal, and with everything bunched together, it's difficult to read.

Despite this, simply start over and give the story some thought. Don't let negativity get to the best of you and keep at it. And please don't start a story with 'once upon a time' as many have already said.

Good luck and I wish you the best

[Miles 127]

it wasnt my story,my cousin made it.but her acount wont load so i let her post on mine

[Arch Angel Keeling]

im srry but that was horrid. there was no story pretty much. i mean all it did was pratty much discride a girl. if i could it would be a 0/5