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A Little Piece of Heaven
Author: Unknown true name
Original story by,
Avenged Sevenfold
Day One 9:27 PM
"WHAT DO YOU MEAN NO??!!" She was laughing at my proposal! what the hell did i do wrong? It was going so well, we even broke in the bed! "Im sorry baby, its too soon!"
she giggles. "do you want me to drive you home?" i was blushing and my face was completely
red with anger. "no im good, i do have a car you know" she said with a chuckle. this is just the beginning, this is nothing, this is just a fraction of what happened to HER. And i found myself pacing back and forth in my living room that same night... thinking about revenge.
Day Two 12:00 AM
She was beautiful, she was walking toward me and she was beautiful. she was in panties and a t-shirt, she was beautiful. i had a knife behind my back, i was dangerous. I was angry, full of hatred, had a knife behind my back and i was dangerous. she smiled, she was... she was... she was going to die; die by my hands. She sat down on the couch with her legs spread and turned on the tv, it wasn't arousing at all. I had just now realized she was nothing but filth and she probably slept around. She'll pay for all the men she cheated on me with; for all those men she **(sorry, get the uncut version)** behind my back... most of all, for the night before
Day Two 12:10 AM
No sound but the tv, no light except from the tv, and she was looking at me in a 'come get me' stature. nothing was stopping me. its my time. she's all mine.
SHE SCREAMED, THE TIMING WAS RIGHT, IT WAS SO WRONG BUT IT WAS SO RIGHT! "NO WORRIES ABOUT THE BLOOD HONEY!!! ILL CALL THE CARPET BOYS TO GET YOUR BLOOD OFF OF THE FLOOR!!!" Must have stabbed her fifty times, i cant believe it. Ripped her heart out right before her eyes, eyes over easy, "EAT IT!!EAT IT!!EAT IT!!"
Day Three 9:00 PM
We had dinner tonight, she was more quiet than usual. "Did you get a haircut honey?" her eyes just rolled into the back of her head. "a little sassy tonight hmm?"
I had the ring in my pocket and i did it. "will you marry me?" i took the string tied to her tooth, pulled it tight and made her head nod up and down. "You will?!?!?" i was so happy, i was god in my own sanctuary. i had complete control over her body. which lead to us rocking the bed the same very night. "She was never this good in bed even when she was sleepin'
now shes just so perfect ive never been quite so **(sorry, get the uncut version)**"
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PREVIEW- The possibilities id never considered, are occouring to the likes of which id never heard. Now an angry soul comes back from beyond the grave, to repossess a body in which id mistreated
- by BLOODHOUND_hellfire7677 |
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- | Submitted on 07/24/2008 |
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- Title: A Little Piece of Heaven
- Artist: BLOODHOUND_hellfire7677
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Description:
This story is the exact opposite of the title. As a young man pops the question and is humiliatingly denied by his significant other, it drives him mad. The choice he makes destroys his life.
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Based off of the Avenged Sevenfold song "A Little Piece of Heaven" - Date: 07/24/2008
- Tags: alittlepeiceofheaven avengedsevenfold hellfire7677 taintedlove murder
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Comments (3 Comments)
- LethalDark13 - 06/02/2009
- Despite the punctuation and grammar the storyline was good.
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- Julia Dream - 12/16/2008
- Stop with the capslock, and you only need one exclamation point or question mark, ever. No exceptions. Also, work on punctuation and grammar, spelling, capitalization, and... well, everything.
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- from my hands - 08/02/2008
- hmm... it's pretty good, but the tone seems a wee bit immature... go through and hardcore edit it, like capitolization and puncture and such, and it'll be just wonderful.
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