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Chapter 1: A Beautiful Awakening
Chapter 1: A Beautiful Awakening
It was dark--too dark. For what seemed like hours, it was still nothing but cruel silence and darkness. The silence clawed away at her, screamed at her as if it had a voice. It felt like it was a horror movie--but this time Aika was the damsel in distress. In a matter of seconds, she realized that she wasn't alone, something, dark and mysterious was making the darkness move in a rapid speed to fast for her eyes to see--but just right for her body to feel it was in motion. Her scream pierced the darkness pressing in on her, as she tried to wiggle free of the treacherous thing that had her by the waist, arms and legs. Finally, she gave up and let it carry her. To what? To where? For this, she did not know. Her hope was stripped from her body while she slowly came to a visible light she was sure that was death. Fortunately, for Aika, it wasn't death. It was something else. Eyes wide with tension and surprise, Aika suddenly stumbled her way into the light, her eyes adjusting quickly as the force let it's hold give away on her. She rubbed her arms, ankles and then stomach, before standing upright to gaze at the scenery surrounding her. Aika gawked at the mysterious garden’s beauty.
Wild flowers in the fields, followed up with an amazing azure colored waterfall, slightly hidden behind several apple trees to the north. Slowly, but steadily, Aika walked cautiously to the edge of a small river channel left abandoned far from the waterfall. She ran her fingers through the water, love struck by it's beautiful color. Minutes ticked away as she stared into the water, watching little fish swim by. Suddenly, she felt a sting in her heart. Startled and frustrated from the sudden distraction--she jumped back.
"W-what the...", she stuttered as she crouched in a low, defensive pose. In a matter of seconds, she saw the danger. Two lights were inches from her face. The lights were an light blue and red color, each beautiful in its own way. The lights mixed together in a blink of an eye and formed a beautiful girl, who looked about her age.
"Who are-", Aika paused and pressed her pale lips in a hard line. She continued to stare at the mysterious person. Who...or what exactly was she? A demon? A goddess?
"Impossible..", Aika mumbled to herself while she stared deeper into the other girls eyes. Self-consciously Aika walked closer to the creature who was now five feet away from her. She stopped abruptly when she was only but one foot from touching her. She was indeed a beautiful girl, she some what reminded her of those goddesses you see in Manga books in Barnes&Noble. Her wings were blue and red translucent swirls that curved up past her head. Her hair was a long natural blond that seemed to flow--although there was no wind. Her eyes full of blue irises and red pupils gazed back at her, holding the exact same expression. Her face was as smooth as butter as she stared back at Aika. She wore a long blue dress that split to her hip, while red long bows dangled where the spilt ended. Moving self-consciously again, Aika reached up to touch the girls face. In unison the beautiful creature also reached up. Instead of the soft, delicate feeling of the girls face on her fingertips, she felt something cold, hard, and flat against the palm of her hand. Aika frowned in frustration.
"What....A mirror..?", Aika paused. Slowly but swiftly she threw her hand back to her side and began to back away. She looked around frantically as she searched for a way out of the garden. As she looked she saw nothing but mirrors that surrounded her like a brick wall. Panicking she slowly began to slip into unconsciousness..
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Her scream stabbed the night as she tumbled out of her sheets and onto the cold wooden floor. Her forehead, now fresh with wet-sticky drops of sweat, began to sting her eyes while she collected herself from the floor. Her blond hair, now a puffy-frizzy madness, clung to her face as she swiped it away from her mouth. "Just a dream...Just a dream." She repeated to herself over and over again. She dragged herself into her slightly small bathroom and began to brush her teeth. The sun's bright light shouted at her through the window. "Stupid sun..", Aika mumbled as she splashed her face with cold water and changed into jeans and a white T-shirt. Sighing at her hair in the mirror, she began to comb painfully through the large-blond clumps of boulders forming around the edges. Finally, she gave up and straightened her hair into a long ponytail that hung down past her shoulders. Clumsily, she made her way down the stairs and into the kitchen. Aika yawned as she snatched a note from the refrigerator and read it quietly.
"Aika, I'm going to be down at the plantation for a while. There's poptarts, orange juice, and Cheerios for you on the table. I love you, xoxo, Mommy."
Aika snorted.
*At the plantation again..Huh, when does she ever not work..*Aika thought as she trudged out the door and began to walk silently to the edge of the forest.
"Ahh..", Aika said as she let out a sigh of relief, grateful to be away from the house for a while. In the corner of her eye, she saw a dark spot. Remembering her dream, Aika froze. She stood silently as her dream suddenly became a reality.
[[Chapter Two almost done!: Vote& Comment on my work! Tys!♥]]
- by StealYourPandaa |
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- | Submitted on 02/06/2009 |
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- Title: Ichi Kokoro: Chapter 1
- Artist: StealYourPandaa
- Description: Aika Nakumi is a 13 going on 14 yr. old girl who was born with a special gift. To bring anything she desires back to life, and to destroy anything she hates. When people find out about this power, they try to cut out her heart, the source of her power to obtain the precious power that she holds. With no one left to depend on for help, she tries to find the goddess who gave her that power, and how to get rid of it.
- Date: 02/06/2009
- Tags: ichi kokoro
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Comments (7 Comments)
- StealYourPandaa - 02/17/2009
- Thanks Hipeople.
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- StealYourPandaa - 02/13/2009
- Grave: Yeah, we worked on that showing and telling thing in my english class a few days after I wrote this. Chapter two should be better, I sort of rushed the story..I like straight action and mystery, details sometimes get boring, but, I'm taking my time thinking hard about chapter two.
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- Gravetye - 02/13/2009
- I really liked this. Overall, very good writing, though the descriptions were a little tedious. Perhaps if you tried showing instead of telling? And the description doesn't have to all be crammed together. You can drop a detail here and there. But besides that..again, I liked it. I think you have some definite talent.
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- NoNo Nope - 02/12/2009
- good and vonderful it ist verys good mesa likes its alots soes write more and i writes funny and itses funs
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- StealYourPandaa - 02/07/2009
- Thanks. ^w^
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- mimisoka - 02/06/2009
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your writeing is very good keep going its really awsome !!!!
xoxo me ....read my blog 1 I LOVE YOUR WRITEING - Report As Spam
- StealYourPandaa - 02/06/2009
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Feel free to give me some tips with my writing! I'm open to new ideas :]] !
*Ps: The next post after me will be counted as first post, sine I think it's fair that this one doesn't count♥♥* - Report As Spam