Where Is He?

• Artist: KisaSohma_Tiger-Twinkles
• Description: A little love story beetween Hayu and Katsuni.
  Note:Katsuni is blind and wears a cloth over her eyes.She has excellent hearing.
• Date: 07/17/2008
• Tags: love

'Where is he?'Katsuni thought as she walked down the street. He had been gone for a couple months. He was in the middle of the war right now. One day right in the middle of battle, he dissapered. No one saw him leave. They were too consintrated on the battle.No one was paying attention. The love of her life was gone. As soon as she heard what happened, her best friend, Matsu, came straight over to comfort her. It didn't help sooth the pain. Every day, every hour, every minute, every second, it hurt. Not like a cut or a sting. Like her heart had died. How could she live without him? Two months later she was walking down the street. She was thinking how hard it was to live without him. All of a sudden a voice called out to her. "Katsuni." She looked up. Tears started streaming down her face. She knew that voice, that deep voice that made her heart melt. It was him. She ran to him and hugged him as tight as she could. "Hayu! They said you were gone!They said-""I was gone." he interupted her."I left.I couldn't fight anymore....I needed to see you..."Tears streamed down his face too."Don't leave..."Katsuni whispered. He smiled."I won't.I won't ever leave you!"He said proudly."I promise..."

And he always kept the promise.

Comments

[FleChan]

I thought it was very sweet. It deffenitally touched me. My boyfriend is a soldier so I can totally relate to the worries and angst the character Katsuni is expressing in this piece.
Although I do agree with one of the previos commenters that the writing should be in paragraph form. However I totally disagree with the commenters who were dissing about the names. I think they are cute names and you should go ahead and use them!!

[intoxicatingDestruction]

hey how can you even prove they aren't Japanese huh
I hate when people do that, tell someone that like everything is wrong in their writing.
I think it is really touching, even though romance bores me so much.

[Lieutenant Elfen_lied]

I'm with the lil'bit*h on this one,you shouldn't give the characters japannese names unless they really are japannese.Because It just makes It seems so...I don't know so.........stupid i guess

[CalvinRexx]

I'd also like to mention that this would be classified as fiction. Non-fiction is based on facts, fiction it just the imagination.

[CalvinRexx]

I see a wall of text, dear. Where are your paragraphs? Don't be afraid to hit the enter key every-so-often.

Also, don't give characters Japanese names unless they are, indeed, Japanese.