Why...

• Artist: iiNightx
• Description: just 1 of the poems i wrote in my journal when i was depressed
  Plz comment
• Date: 11/24/2008
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when im here you are happy
when im not your not
the time im not your happy
the time i am your not
these emotions are scary
no one cares
you care but they dont
being alone is frieghtning
for the ones that do care
but if they really cared
why would they let you be alone
when all you do for them is everything
they repay you with lonelyness
with that lonlelyness come
depression
within that depression
becomes doubt
after that doubt
that person will no londer live
they would kill themself with a final note
that would normally say
"I am sorry ___ but this was the only way to relieve the pain."
but if I were to do this
it would say
"Why would you bother crying over me?
you always left me alone not caring
what i may do or not do.
im sorry ___"

Comments

[x_V-Ghost-V_x]

Ha you a*****e B-B-B-BeanCup-, didn't your mother ever teach you, to not say anything if it's not nice? You could have stopped at grammar issues, you could've have offered advice, but no, you go and try to berate someone who is trying to write? What the hell gives you the right to do that? Why don't you stop trying to build up your own ego by tearing people down! The poem is great, it's not our fault that you are an uncultured fool who knows nothing about the mechanics of poetry.

[Haruka Van Reign]

JJ.....

Is this poem about...me?

v.v *hugglez* I dont like you sad.....im sry for ever hurting you....v.v

[Raven_0f_The_Dead]

let me ask why do people have controdict what they dont understand

[iiNightx]

dude who gives wat u say
if it sux then why do ALL the OTHER
gaians love it
just because you have no clue wat being depressed is doesnt mean you have to rat on it just because your afraid

[B-B-B-BeanCup]

Why.... is this shitty poem spotlighted? Form is part of function, and if you can't get your English correct then you are not expressing yourself as clearly and as well as you could. Grammar issues aside, this poem STILL sucks. We all get depressed, we all feel terrible, and we all have sadness. What you need to do as a poet is make these feelings new and interesting to me, and all you've done is say HEY LOOK AT ME I AM DEPRESSED A BLOO BLOO BLOO. I'm disgusted, not empathetic, with your plight.

[iiNightx]

grammer isnt the point to anything posted in the arena if it did then everyone would have 0s. its wat the poem is about not english >.

[-Atems-Fairy-]

grammar issues